TrojenMonkey's Reviews

[Twilight Galaxy]

Meh

I could not find any artistic highlights in this video, it mostly lagged the whole way, the dark figure animation was half-assed, most background materials weren't rendered decently..And most of all, it didn't present a real storyline. This video does not seem to be planned at all, everything seems random and out of context.

2 points for some drawing & colouring skills, 1 point for the FBF scan animation which is honestly delightful. The rest was dreadful.

aba1 responds:

well ya the quality in the images was quite low you know how much I had to shrink this movie to get it on here it is litterally 1/8th the original size and even after all that it still lags so yes some of the quality isn't there but that's to minimize lag. The only reason I could imagine it giving as much lag as you let on is your computer being shitty?

Honestly I laugh at your dark figure comment because its based on the same style of limbo which won best game in its category for the year and everyone I know was impressed at how close it looked hell the comment above yours hates this movie because he thought it was literally ripped from the game that's how close the aesthetic is so I really don't see how it is half assed?

[Furbaby Loves You! A]

One tiny flaw.

At Punish, I did not understand why you used letters from hebrew?
Further more, that demon-looking character titled "Molah", also any demonic entity is not scribed in the jewish bible, or at any part of the colture. That part had me baffled.

This could've been a more artistic film, if you used more ... 'Poetry rather than use urban words such as "Fuck".
Also, some of the presented art made the film look trippy and artistic, while at some points it made it look akward and childish.

W-P-S responds:

Moloch is not a demon, it's a Cananite god to whom people sacrificed children.
The old testament keeps on repeating how you shouldn't do shit for Moloch.

Also, "fuck" is a very poetic word.
Very expressive, when used correctly.

[[ClockDay09] Running NG]

Lookie.

Congrats man, You've made a fine parody production, well served on the front page. =]

[Solipskier]

Excellent game for school.

Got a free slot at your daily agenda while away from your stationary computer system?
This is one of the games to play.
Managed to scoop a total high score of 101,920,680, and every single medal, I believe my highest multiplayer score was around 160~200.

A very well done job, both of you and the composer.

[Amateur Surgeon]

Blah.

The game is okay, refresing and so on.

But not duarible, it repeats it self pretty fast.
Shame.

[STICKUP!]

Nm.

There is a slight issue of convenience with the 'user-interferance', although the game have a large variety of items to choose from, its important to keep the interactive styled too.

[The Motherboard]

That's a tad too loud to be called "Ambient", pip. This is all over the place, no focus to be heard even though the sound itself is pretty nice, but the tempo and composition is way off, imo.

I'd suggest you try to create tunes with slower tempo; it fails to represent anything due to the fact it seems it always try to run away to the next verse.
Try to create an adagio, melancholic melody; that should give you a really good practice to commit to a single subject / theme / atmosphere. The bonus is that it should expend your abilities as an author.

[techno crash]

Funny thing you've done here.
Usually the beats are the background pattern; not the leading instrument instead of the melody.
Furthermore, if you label this as a loop; make sure it loops seamlessly. Because frankley every single tune/song which ends and repeats itself is a loop under that definition.

I can see this being a menu theme, it only needs to loop better.

justice511 responds:

thank you for your feed back :) but im probably not making any more loops bnecause i fonud a new program and it works grate for me go check it out :)

[your space ship]

Not much of space.

This is not much of the regualr "space" tune, the traditional way to create such themes are by creating sound with high tempo with short bursts. (Which you did, but in a very calm fashion way.)

The tune is very good, but I would tag is as a "2D-Prison-cell" kind of-tune, Think of machinarium, I think you'll hear the connection.
(8/10 because, really, there is no climate to the tune. Even silent-ambients should get those.)

Good luck on your future endeavors.

[Sister]

This painting reminds me of a few scenes from Fate/ Stay Night, and that says alot regarding the atmosphere it conveys, kudos!

[Universe]

This really reminds me a passage of Le Nausea..
"I'm in a the park. I drop onto a bench between great black tree-trunks, between the black, knotty hands reaching towards the sky. A tree scrapes at the earth under my feet with a black nail. I would like to let myself go[...] but I can't, existence penetrates me everywhere."

As much as we lay outward, we lay inward just as much; an existential calamity..Not quite what you were trying to say I presume; but I still correlate it to my image, even though yours is alot more about birth rather death.

[Descend into Madness]

The farthest arm seems to fail the figure's perspective, I can't even figure out where it is or what is it. Is it his right arm or left? Is it behind him or before him?
That thrown me completely off from this piece, even though it's done really well - that detail really ruined it for me.